I did a close beta test with a couple of people I know. They both indicated (and the truth is I agree) that the Bonnie the Bartender story was the weakest. Since none of you have seen the game, you don’t know what I am talking about. Basically, she is a bartender you pick up at the end of her shift, you go shoot some pool, some funny stuff happens, and then a totally expected twist ending happens, and then it ends abruptly. The main reason it ends there is that I could not think of an appropriate GOOD ending that I already didn’t use with one of the other characters.
The sentiment of one of my testers is: 1.) She is not very interesting looking, 2.) We know very little about her, and what she says does not even seem honest, is she supposed to be good or bad? The truth is I never spent much time on the Bonnie model, explaining problem 1, and maybe my writing skills aren’t that great explaining problem 2.
So as usual I gave it some thought, and decided: 1.) I need a new model, and 2.) I will use the badly defined nature of her character to my advantage. The new model is shown above. She used to look like this. Gone is her undefined ethnicity and too simple and modest dress. In its place is a pretty but stereotypical American. None of the major characters are blonde, so I went with that.
I left the not very revealing dialogue in. It is up to the reader to decide if she is good or bad, and in the pictures I did, there are signs of both.
This is all because of the brilliant idea I had: I may not be able to come up with an appropriate good ending, but I can think of a lot of appropriate BAD endings. So there are now 10 endings to Bonnie’s story, some of which show her as a good girl, some as a bad girl, and the endings purposely contradict one another. (I’ll probably never return to this character, so it really does not matter which ending is the real one.) Breaking the rules of the visual novel format; you have no choice which ending you are going to get.
With about 30 re-renders, and 20 new pictures, I believe I have added a whole new fun dimension to the story.